hey guys!
Joaquin wrote the script which is great!
Though he wrote it at the end of spring break, which isnt great...
but I might as well look it over right?
okay so some key modifications that were made is the uh...
oh this was written over the original version.
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| gulp |
okay i cant really make any comparisons with evidence, but ill use my old blog post on the script to help.
Immediately I noticed that joaquin had changed the scenes of otto completing the list to be... not a montage. Instead its a fully fleshed out scene and then the rest is implied, which is honestly nicer since a montage could ruin our pacing or at the very least heavily affect it.
Another thing I like is how a lot of jokes were kept in or simply improved, like for example how the "serious medical condition" was added in and also how it had an extra appearance. Or the addition of the chicken joke and uh.
damn I really dont have much do I.
Well Ill end off by saying that Joaquin is lowk a great writer and he could very easily go on to work in the film industry.
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| screenshot from a game session with my friends |
Like... Joaquins writing is lowkirkenually
Houdemon. (2024b, September 4). Tole tole cat: Gulp. YouTube. https://www.youtube.com/shorts/A80-m59rgJo
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